1. I don't believe I gave enough specific examples to support my points. I think I need to add quotes with specific page numbers.
2. Is it formatted correctly?
3. Is the language formal enough?
4. Did I accurately reflect the essay? Are there any key points in her article I missed? I need to re-read the essay to make sure.
5. Does my analysis have a solid organizational flow? I may need to rearrange my ideas.
Morgan, I remember when I read your paper that you did a good job with the use of formal language. I would just remind to look over the editing mistakes and the little typos that you had. Other than that, your paper was good in length and had good ideas.
ReplyDeleteYour paper is very clear and easy to understand throughout, even though it is an in-depth rhetorical analysis. You also have very strong word choice, and your analysis on this piece makes me as a reader, rethink how I originally felt when I read this piece. This essay fulfills the assignment correctly. Your rhetorical analysis has all the parts it should. Your introduction is strong but wording should be revised, and your summary is very strong. To make a more effective thesis, you need to introduce the methods used by the author in your thesis instead of focusing so much on who the audience is. Your supporting reasons and evidence are well prepared and clear, but you should address more alternative viewpoints. Your conclusion is strong, but it needs to be ended better. Your claim seems to be, “Through her essay, “Lady Power,” she applies the skilled techniques of a writer so that her piece speaks and infiltrates the conscious of her audience.” It is supported by evidence—her appeals to the techniques used. You spend an amble amount of time on each rhetorical appeal, about a paragraph on each. It is adequate, but there should be more time spent addressing opposing opinions. You maintain formality throughout most of your analysis, but there are times when your writing becomes less formal. Go through and check your sentence structure. You use a lot of commas that disrupt your paper’s flow, along with creating fragments throughout. Also, focus on revising your thesis by concentrating on the appeals that the author used throughout her piece.
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